Topic: A Child's Destiny (My CCS Story) (Read 28488 times)

D.J.P · « **on:** April 02 2005, 10:41 am »

[This story is now available here - http://www.capturedwings.net/fanfiction/display.php?sid=1]
-------------------
Sakura Li (nee. Kinomoto): Sakura Avalon (26 Yrs)
Syaoran Li: Li Showron (25 Yrs)
Tomoyo Hiiragisawa (nee. Daidouji): Madison Taylor (25 Yrs)
Eriol Hiiragisawa: Eli Moon (26 Yrs)

Please note, I do not own Cardcaptors/Cardcaptor Sakura. Iâ€™m only using the characters. The only character I own is the Character of Shannon Li.
In the story, Li and Sakura are ~26, have been married for almost 8 years and have a six year old boy.

A Childâ€™s Destiny.

Prologue

May 12th 2012.

A happy family picnic is enjoyed by a beautiful lady and handsome man.
Their six year old son is running around the park, being chased by another beautiful lady.

As the couple watch their son being chased by his auntie without a care in the world, it seems like nothing can pierce the peaceful atmosphere of the park. But suddenly the tranquil environment was shattered by an ear-piecing scream.

The beautiful lady now lying flat on the ground in a pool of blood; and suddenly the once peaceful scene has become a nightmare. The man pulls out a sword and tries to strike one of the assailants but misses and is knocked to the ground. Sadly joining his poor wife.

The child, who was being restrained by his auntie, breaks from her grasp, runâ€™s forward screaming, picks up his fatherâ€™s sword and takes down the first assailant before he knows whatâ€™s happening.

The second one spins around in surprise as his partner falls down, shock was clearly registered in his eyes, as he meets the same fate as his friend.

The child drops the sword and falls to the ground. The other lady comes up and hugs him close as he cries and looks towards nearby bushes.

Picking up the crying child, she takes one look at the scene before her, then turns and walks out of the park to call the police and to take young boy home. Looking down at the child, who somehow has managed to fall asleep in her arms, she just realized that her family will now have a hard time ahead.
Coming to terms with the lost of family members is hard enough as it is, but having to deal with a child who just watched his parents being killed, well thatâ€™s another matter in itself. Signing to herself, she carried the sleeping child away, wondering what challenges tomorrow will bring.

==================
Well there it is, this is a revised prologue that I did last night (while I had a splitting headacheÂ

)
Comments are welcomed.

Little Wolf · « **Reply #1 on:** April 02 2005, 10:51 am »

Cool...already read this and chapter 1 too.

ashleygurl · « **Reply #2 on:** April 02 2005, 01:59 pm »

kewl...i like the way how you describe things....i like stories with loads of descriptions about the scene. Coz i like the vivid idea of a place where the characters are in...but i never did as well as you did....gd job!!!! XD

gahh...and please dun use names from the dubbed version of CCS....coz i would never get used to it > o < and i like the original names better!!!!

Keep writting!!!!

D.J.P · « **Reply #3 on:** April 02 2005, 02:02 pm »

Thank you

and don't worry the story is using the Japanese names, I've gotten quite use to them

(since my collection of CCS is almost complete)

Ralea · « **Reply #4 on:** April 02 2005, 05:27 pm »

You did that even if you still had a headache?

Amazing!

D.J.P · « **Reply #5 on:** April 02 2005, 05:40 pm »

yeap I did

Miss Jenni-Maie · « **Reply #6 on:** April 04 2005, 01:54 pm »

I like it!
Err...not the fact that two innocent people were killed, of course.
Your attention to detail impresses me!
[waits patiently for more]

D.J.P · « **Reply #7 on:** April 04 2005, 01:55 pm »

Chapter 1 is about half way done, really need to finish it

- Yeah sorry about killing them (I'm sure you know who there are), but its neccesary for the story

Little Wolf · « **Reply #8 on:** April 04 2005, 06:09 pm »

Quote from: Endoh on April 04 2005, 01:54 pm

I like it!
Err...not the fact that two innocent people were killed, of course.
Your attention to detail impresses me!
[waits patiently for more]

yeah, SLi's really good in writing.

one of his other talents apart from flying..

D.J.P · « **Reply #9 on:** April 04 2005, 07:34 pm »

thanks for the compliment

ashleygurl · « **Reply #10 on:** April 05 2005, 01:03 am »

So when is chapter 2 gonnna be posted up

D.J.P · « **Reply #11 on:** April 05 2005, 01:10 pm »

when I finished writing it

Ralea · « **Reply #12 on:** April 05 2005, 08:47 pm »

Hope it won't take 10 years.

D.J.P · « **Reply #13 on:** April 05 2005, 08:49 pm »

nah, I have all the ideas for the entire story, just need to put it down into words

(when I have the time or the urge to write

)

ashleygurl · « **Reply #14 on:** April 06 2005, 08:25 pm »

wow...its pretty hard to set up a kewl plot for a CCS story...since CCS fanfics are sooo well 'common'.

I've wrote a few fanfics, but somehow they're only one-shot or either i just stop around 2 chapters. *sigh*

D.J.P · « **Reply #15 on:** April 06 2005, 08:35 pm »

exculiding one-shots, I only have about 10 or so fanfics that are complete.

Little Wolf · « **Reply #16 on:** April 07 2005, 02:50 am »

You really like writing then, do you?

D.J.P · « **Reply #17 on:** April 07 2005, 02:10 pm »

they aren't my own :sad face:

Miss Jenni-Maie · « **Reply #18 on:** April 07 2005, 02:29 pm »

what's not your own?

D.J.P · « **Reply #19 on:** April 07 2005, 02:36 pm »

one word: time

(lack of)

News:

AuthorTopic: A Child's Destiny (My CCS Story) (Read 28488 times)